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Anna

Cool! your images are clear, and lead the eye nicely to the important information. Your story flows really well and the message is sweet. Maybe you could use less narration at the beginning, and bring in sound effects so elevate it further. Well done!

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Aug 23, 2022, 11:56 AM

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Mara

Your submission was really, really good!

I think the strongest point here are the characters. They all act in ways that are believable and interesting, especially around something that is as out of the ordinary as flying.

Your drawings transmitted the story well, and I like how you showed the passage of time through the character designs.

I think you did a fantastic job, and I wish you all the best in all your future endeavors!

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Aug 22, 2022, 5:25 PM

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Abbygayle

This is such a sweet story! I can totally relate having to move and change schools- its so hard! That helps the main character be super relatable to me and many others. I think this is a great story with a great message. Congratulations on finishing the XP and making such a nice story. You should feel so proud :)

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Aug 22, 2022, 5:02 PM

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Julieta

Hi Morgan! I'm glad to see your final submission!

I cansee the incredible effort you have put into this story. The amount of drawings you have is really amazing, and all of them are really expressive.
I really like that your story revolves around celebrating each person's differences instead of trying to fit in. This is particularly important in adolescence, when each one is trying to find his/her place in the world. It's a very moving story!

I have enjoyed watching your story evolution over the weeks. Congratulations on finishing the Xperiential program!

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Aug 22, 2022, 9:02 AM

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Ho Kiu

love your story!
It's simple but meaningful :)

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Aug 22, 2022, 7:03 AM

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Habiba

I love your idea really much! A had a recurrent dream in my childhood that I can fly haha do really connect to Aya! Love how clear the idea and visual it is but has a really strong and meaningful moral! Great job! Wishing you all the best 🙌🏻

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Aug 22, 2022, 1:46 AM

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Once upon a time, there was a girl named Aya who, on her fifth birthday, wished to be able to fly, and as she blew out her candles, her wish came true!

Aya’s parents were shocked as she floated out of her chair and joyfully flew around the room. Aya flew out the door and into the sky making loops and flying around trees. She landed on a tree branch with a huge smile across her face.

Every day, Aya would fly and play with her friends. Once, her best friend Lizzy was flying her kite, when it got stuck in a large oak tree. Aya quickly came to the rescue by flying up to the kite and untangling it. As she flew down from the tree, Aya was elated that she could help solve Lizzy’s problem. As Lizzy flew the kite again, Aya flew circles around it until she came down and they played and laughed together.

She would even help rescue their kites out of trees and reach things on high shelves.

Until one day, Aya and her family move to a new town. Aya cries as she says goodbye to Lizzy. Now, Aya has to attend sixth grade at a new middle school.

Aya is afraid that the kids at her new school will think it is weird that she can fly, so Aya doesn’t show her gift at school.

Aya is quiet and sits by herself. She wants to make friends, but she is afraid to talk to the kids at her new school.

Aya sees Cara talking to everyone and wearing fashionable clothes and makeup. Aya feels jealous of Cara, she seems so cool.

So, Aya gathers her confidence and sits with Cara at lunch.

Aya and Cara chat and become fast friends.

So, Aya invites Cara over to her house after school.

Aya is hopeful that Cara can be her best friend similar to Lizzie. So, Aya trusts Cara with her secret and shows Cara that she can fly.

Cara is shocked that Aya can actually fly! She worries that Aya will get more attention than her if the other kids know Aya can fly.

So, Cara lies and tells everyone at school that Aya is really weird because she pretends to fly and plays like a little kid.

Now, Aya is ignored at school, and no one wants to be her friend. She sits by herself at lunch, and after school, none of the other kids hang out with her.

Aya feels sad and lonely, and decides to not let her secret out again.


Until Finally, Aya and her classmates are on a field trip to the zoo, when a child falls into the moat around the bear exhibit. Aya makes the split second decision to save the child even though it means revealing her gift of flight to the whole school.

And ever since then, Aya has been accepted at school because she chose to be her true self instead of trying to blend in with her peers.

The moral of the story is, always be who you are instead of trying to be like everybody else.

This is where the special thanks would go!  I’m assuming they will be a little longer this week, therefore, I designed extra space for them. If there is far more description and special thanks then there is space, this entire box becomes scrollable.

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