Hey Dakota! This was a really fun story! With the kind of sound effects you used and with your narration, this could easily sell as an episode of an original cartoon series - it was that professional! :)
I also liked how you used lines and tones in your storyboards, the two-shots during conversation, the ground shot of Bullseye stuck in the honey - you used all the different elements of storyboarding very effectively!
All in all, I found your story to be very enjoyable! Great work! :)

I really enjoyed your story!

I feel like you employed the sound effects and voice acting effectively, and the drawings showcased the plot well.

Congratulations on getting this far, and I wish you all the best for the future!

Thanks so much Mara! I appreciate the feedback and it was a great experience making this!

Hey, Dakota! Congrats on finishing your storyreel! I've been following this one for a while, so it's awesome to see the final version for the class.  I already quite liked the previous submission, and this one only improves on it. You've made a lot of really great changes that not only make this more fun, but also give it more momentum and just help it make more sense overall. I love adding the bee and making the spider friendly. Just really good decisions all over the place. You should be super proud of what you've created!

Thanks Allen! Your feedback has definitely made this project better and thanks for following!

Hi Dakota! I’m so glad to see your final submission! I know how hard you’ve worked redoing several parts of the story, so this is an amazing achievement.

I like the changes that you have introduced from your previous submissions. I see that you have included what we talked last week about showing several attempts to grow the plant, which makes his struggle with it more evident, well done!

You have changed the interaction with the insects as well. In this new way, I can now see more clearly what you were telling me last week about showing that it is better to work as a team than alone before reaching the third act. I think it's a good idea, so your character changes his mind progressively, instead of doing it suddenly at the end.

I also like that you have changed his enemy to be another insect, the same size as him instead of a bear, this is much more believable and makes your story flow better.

Great job and congratulations on finishing the Xperiential program! It has been a very hard work, I know you have made many changes in your story, but I think it has been worth it. I hope you have learned as much as I have!

Thanks so much Julieta! Your feedback has been so helpful and I really appreciate all your comments over the weeks! I loved your final product as well and had a great experience during xperential!